CLARION, Writer’s Craft #65 – Staging Conversation, by Lynda Williams

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I write articles for news media, poetry, novels and screenplay. Not having read the story, just the example paragraphs, if I understand correctly, the short paragraph is the original paragraph, and the long one is the revised version, whether it is children or adult books, in my view the original version does not show emotion or worth of what is going on. The second paragraph shows, does not just tell, the reader how they feel about and react to what is going on, it also gives a idea of the character’s personalities.